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thank you for all your suggestions

thank you for all your suggestions

I have decided to take a few of your suggestions and run with them. Changing the numbers to just store names was super, and doing something with the black plow was another. Again so much appreciate your time and wisdom.

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I forgot to suggest to be mindful of the statistics. One of the best functions of online advertising is that the success is completely measurable. Set some goals and monitor that they are being achieved.

How many people are viewing the page? How did they get there? How long did they stay? Did they contact you? How many of those contacts become customers? How much is that customer "worth"?

Its fun stuff, (for me anyway) to think about.

Good luck!
 
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Lots of good advice so far. I think your web site is appealing, concise, and aesthetically balanced overall. I even like the classy font. Maybe increase font size on your telephone number up top and separate it from the "Call 24/7" a bit. You want this information handy of course; you could include the phone number in other spots since it only appears once on the site. For example, include it in the "Snow Services of New Mexico LLC" section with the address. Also at the very bottom of the page in the black area.

In journalism school they used to teach writers to spell out numbers one through nine and use numbers for 10 and beyond. I think this was under the Chicago Book of Style. That's probably why your designer did it this way. I would never mix and match though in a list such as this. I would go all numbers.

The photo of the plow on the parking lot is a good one. It would be even better with your wife in the cab, a big smile on her face (or your daughter) to reinforce the "family business" theme.

The section on your family lists two glowing adjectives for your wife but none for your daughter. I am sure she is talented too! Just jumped out at me a little; not a huge deal.

I don't think there is a hyphen in Walmart.

You misspelled the word "led" in the second paragraph of the "About the Owner" section.

Good luck with your business, arrow!
 
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I have decided to take a few of your suggestions and run with them. Changing the numbers to just store names was super, and doing something with the black plow was another. Again so much appreciate your time and wisdom.

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Dave it's the least I could do ! Good luck ! When time permits we need some winners ! :00hour:0008
 
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simple and to the point. looks pretty good.

this stood out to me though.


" In addition to 60 Wal-Marts, we service 32 Bank of Americas, 20 Walgreens, 11 Targets, six grocery stores, two Academy Sports, 10 Dollar Generals"


why use #s and then spell out six and two and then go back to numbers. :shrug:

just seemed odd to me
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The writer was following the APA (American Psychological Association) style. APA, along with Chicago and MLA (Modern Language Association), are considered the top-three acceptable formats in academia.

According to APA style guideline, one generally "uses words for numbers below 10 that do not represent precise measurements."

Peace! :)

http://writing.wisc.edu/Handbook/DocAPAPrinciples.html
 
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something like this would help customers to see when it's their turn:
http://www.esri.com/esri-news/arcwatch/0914/plowing-through-winter


similar system can be done using open data:
http://www.auratkartalla.com/
white:sand
red:salt
yellow:plowing

some university student made that Helsinki real time open data map in a weekend so
i'm sure some local student would be happy to help you with it.

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GIS! A fellow nerd? Not that I get to do the techy stuff much anymore...
 
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Well. Not sure if one should sugar coat a response or just be honest. I think it needs some work still.

What's the name of your company? You need a header with your name. One that looks catchy. Maybe a designed logo.

The first thing you see when you open the page is...."Servicing New Mexico and West Texas for 15 Years !"
Who's servicing and what are they servicing? That head says nothing.

That head should have your company name first in big letters, in a graphic logo style. And then it should say, "We are a snow removal company serving New Mexico and West Texas for the past 15 Years." You have to be very direct and descriptive sometimes.

The "About the Owner" section that was written....Every paragraph, except for the last one, is a run on sentence. They go on forever with too many "ands." You really need periods and new sentences in each of those.

The photo up top is OK but the one on the side is not good. Get a better one or remove it. Making it a lot smaller might help.

The head, "The weather never closes" is awkward. Does weather open and close? Maybe something like, "the weather never stops and we are always open."

Lastly. Check with the Better Business Bureau. It be really good to have their logo on your site with a link to their page. Many professional businesses do too.

Sorry if that was too long or too negative. Just my opinion and trying to be helpful.
 
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The website needs better grammar, and the company name needs to be more clear. I'm turned off immediately with poor grammar. Put your logo/name of your company right on top too. I think its a great start, and it just needs a little tweaking. Best wishes, and c'mon snow!
 
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Well. Not sure if one should sugar coat a response or just be honest. I think it needs some work still.

What's the name of your company? You need a header with your name. One that looks catchy. Maybe a designed logo.

The first thing you see when you open the page is...."Servicing New Mexico and West Texas for 15 Years !"
Who's servicing and what are they servicing? That head says nothing.

That head should have your company name first in big letters, in a graphic logo style. And then it should say, "We are a snow removal company serving New Mexico and West Texas for the past 15 Years." You have to be very direct and descriptive sometimes.

The "About the Owner" section that was written....Every paragraph, except for the last one, is a run on sentence. They go on forever with too many "ands." You really need periods and new sentences in each of those.

The photo up top is OK but the one on the side is not good. Get a better one or remove it. Making it a lot smaller might help.

The head, "The weather never closes" is awkward. Does weather open and close? Maybe something like, "the weather never stops and we are always open."

Lastly. Check with the Better Business Bureau. It be really good to have their logo on your site with a link to their page. Many professional businesses do too.

Sorry if that was too long or too negative. Just my opinion and trying to be helpful.
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I made this header and logo kind of quickly to show you what I meant. I think SixFive was talking about something similar.

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